ext_37188 ([identity profile] rens-sanctuary.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] flamingsword 2009-05-04 12:25 am (UTC)

It does sound harsh, yes. "Would be just as likely to be pissed off." and "It's sad I don't know how to yell at you." are very real and visceral sentences and they are rather angry. I'm not sure what I would change to make it resigned, except to convey somehow that there were experiences you wanted to share but couldn't? That you missed out on having a male influence but got used to it? I'm not sure if those two things are representative of your experiences but I think they convey resigned actuality.

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